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I'm sorry I fell in love with you
For causing pain is the best thing I do
I should have left when love came around
But I found it's rarity too profound

I thought I could love and leave things be
But I can't so here's my plea
I'm sorry I let some feelings get in the way
But I fell in love so what else can I say

I wish I could turn back the hands of time
So I could stop this ongoing crime
Now I'm left wishing for a fresh start
Because it hurts to have a broken heart

Love screws up how and what you think
And causes mood swings as often as you blink
I won't allow myself to sit here and wait
For true love to turn to hate

There's so many reasons that can be given
For me wanting to be forgiven
It's about being in love with someone who you shouldn't really be in love with. In my case my friend. I love her more than being in love with her if you understand what I mean. But still there's always apart of me that would like to think we could end up together. Best Friends and Love can be tricky, but we cool anyway so it doesn't matter.
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MasterofWordsAndArt Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i know this so well, and it sucks cause it's at the point where you just wish they'd hate you. excellent job capturing that!
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DominiqueG Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Exactly how I feel!
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ROCKSTEADY7 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2010
this is so lovely..........
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BLUEYESBLACKHEART Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2009
*deep breath* i'm going through the same situation right now...and it sucks so much because i love her and i can't have her. Its like a craving that wont ever be satiated...

This is beautiful
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Twinnette Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2009   Writer
:D yeah, wow, true true.
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ama-pusin-stock Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2009
I like so much the first words "I'm sorry I fell in love with you"
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inju-onnanoko Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2009
this is such a good poem. sad, but good.
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Der-Alter-Mann Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2009  Professional Interface Designer
I know that feeling :s
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crystal-purr Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2009
i fell in love with my best friend too..
i told her, and everything fell apart.
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paperflower3 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2008
Hit it square in the eye, buddy.
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IJustWannaBeMe Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2007
Dude, I totally know how that feels...this year has been so sucky, and that fits so perfectly. It was beautifully written and rhymed. :)
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nociception Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2007
great peom can really relate to it
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Grumnar Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2007   Writer
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I can relate, though it's not a best friend. It's really beautiful. :+fav:
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poetic-belle Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2006
its like you read my mind....just a couple months in advance...good job :)
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DevStyle Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2006
i exactly know what situation you're in...
sucks, dunnit? :(
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MovingSalad Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2006
Very touching and emotional.
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cgwyllie Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2006
I have to say that this piece really strikes a nerve with me at the moment. Nice work :)
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gwensaer Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2006  Student Photographer
wow. strong message.
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Lisa26 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2006   Writer
I can relate, great writing!
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Africanime Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2006   Filmographer
O.O wow.... you really are something.
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bluragazza Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2006
:wow: a VERY beautiful poem! nicely written! :+favlove:
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killifish101 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2006
oh wow, nice
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ice--eyes Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2006
mmm, i like it, and i know these feelings all too well. i wish i had stayed happy with the friendship we had because it no longer exists. :(
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Aixrotciv Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2006
:clap: It's good but not astounding ^.^

I think it might be in the word choice. But the message is conveyed clearly and emotionally so it's fine.
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TehBecky Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2006   Photographer
Brilliant, great work
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aimeejjj Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2006
I feel as though this could potentially be a decent poem. But the restriction that rhyming has imposed on it really, really brings it down to something you'd expect and early years high school student to produce. That is not an insult, it is merely an observation. My best advice would be to use personal references and avoid phrases like "I wish I could turn back the hands of time so I could stop this ongoing crime", it just sounds quite lame! The closing lines are promising and sit nicely.
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ConKid118 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2006
I'm not really a shmooey poetic person...but wow! thats like...wow!
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ember-reed Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
^_^ this actually reminds me of a song by vnv nation.. beloved. it has the same theme, and tone.
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PleaseWakeUp Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2006   Photographer
I really like this! :+fav:!
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lady-deathrose Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2006  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I ended up marrying a good friend, my husband is my best friend, really, he knows me the best, but I know things can turn out other ways in friendships, too, when love comes around... In a way I can relate, I've been there in early doubt at least, too. This poem touches something in me, it brings feelings to the surface. It has a message to say, I like that. Very emotional. :+fav:
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Mithril-Dragoness Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2006
Friends + Love = not so good sometimes. Sorry about the feelings it brought- they are heavy-handed and annoying. Nice poem by the way.
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inkmenot Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2006
thats what's happening to me right now... i can relate SO much. love it
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Chris-T Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2006  Student Interface Designer
no, i just dont like poetry.
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Schmody Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2006
damnit man, i can relate.
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inahole Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2006   Writer
Yeah she does. And she loves me. But we both love each other too much to ever be in love. If that makes sense. But of course sometimes it's hard and feelings (mine) can be altered. But our relationship is the best in the world.
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inahole Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2006   Writer
Yeah she does. And she loves me. But we both love each other too much to ever be in love. If that makes sense. But of course sometimes it's hard and feelings (mine) can be altered. But our relationship is the best in the world.
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JessaMar Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
I can really, really identify with that. This is likely to be none of my business, but does your friend know you love her?
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Nightgazer27913 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2006
i love it though it's sad. still you remind me of someone...for all i i know you could have absolutely no idea what i'm talking about and most likely do...but still i can't help but question...oh well,i can relate i've been the friend and the one w/ the crush!( although yours sounds deeper than a "crush")
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StrandedFighter Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2006
I think a lot of people can relate so this is the poetry we need :)
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angelshavehalos Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2006   Writer
i think this is amazing, ive got a male friend who loves me and i might be able to understand how he feels now, it must be so hard i dont feel the same, and ive got a boyfriend that i do love, im just gonna try harder to make sure that my friend knows im always here for him, thanks so much, uve really helped me, such a wonderful moving poem
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badmousey Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2006
So touching, and so real...
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DarknessBfallenU Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2006
This is beautiful but sad, and true... great work <33
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Sparks018 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2006   Writer
I really enjoyed this piece and I also relate.

I'm not an expert poetry writer so I can't offer anything in the way of constructive comment I'm afraid...I just felt I had to comment.

As I've said to other writers before...I really admire the way that you can use rhyme without losing anything of the powerful message held within the poem. Although a lot of the poetry I write is similar...it lacks a lot compared with your piece.

Thanks for a great piece of work!
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el-poeta-loco Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2006   Photographer
ok, little bit of critique, its got some cliches, but not many, and thats quite rare in poetry these days. ;) its got a nice, free flow about it, and doesn't strictly rhyme and flow... how do i explain this... :XD: its not stiff.

i love it, and i can relate. :( that matters alot to me, besides another stupid romio and juliet poem.

thank you! i enjoyed that. :D
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inahole Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2006   Writer
thanks for the comments
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i love this. i like how it captures the emotions, i can feel the poem, if you know what i mean. Good Job!
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TailoredAngelsHorror Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2006  Student Writer
This is sad, but I can relate, good job! And thanks for the addy :)
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Abatrasau Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2006
hm....thats pretty good. I can relate...but it turned out my friend liked me too...oh well. Very nice though
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